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No you didn't. Your strategy of only addressing the precise problems which are posted here is not at all appropriate for a FAC, especially given that wide-ranging issues have been identified. Given this, I'd suggest that the FA delegates close this nomination as I don't think that it's likely to be
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How can the etymology of the name of the city be irrelevant? Also, if you state that I do not include enough references, which you did by saying "A significant amount of material through the article is not referenced," how can you now say that I used too much referencing material?
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Again with the no examples. If I should not have submitted this for consideration because of all the errors, you should not be allowed to judge it without giving examples of what to fix. I have been polite to you, Nick-D, and you have been nothing but condescending to me.
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You leave out the "but, you don't know what you're doing" you really think of me. I will give you the benefit of the doubt, however, because of AGF. When this article finally receives the FA status it deserves, I will have the last laugh.
433:"The Canada Wide Daily Standard for MP2.5 is 30 micrograms per cubic meter. This standard was exceeded on one day during 2011." what is MP2.5? Is this fact significant enough for such a prominent placement (final sentence) in the lead?
245:"The Archaeological and Historic Sites Board of Ontario considers this voyage worthy of note as shown by the photo." 1st: avoid self-referencing; 2nd: isn't The Archaeological and Historic Sites Board of Ontario now known as the
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With respect, if you can't spot unreferenced material you really shouldn't have nominated this for FA status. I am not going to trawl through the article identifying unreferenced material given that it's very easy to spot.
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The images being left justified is necessary for people viewing the material on smartphones or tablets with smaller screens. Someone noted to me on the Talk page that it was not displaying correctly, and I changed it.
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The first two paragraphs of the 'Name' section are not really relevant to this topic - the city was named after the latin word for
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232:"This was the first time anything other than a canoe,or other oar-powered vessel, sailed into Lake Huron." consider trying the sentence without commas
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