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On that note, the article uses Osbern as the primary name throughout. The article is titled "Osbern fitzRichard" but it appears that his last name was actually Scrob. Does this have something to do with French/Norman naming customs? If so, leave it as is. If not, replace most mentions of Osbern with
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