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Elegant variation can reduce clarity and introduce confusion. For example, it can create the impression that the identity of the person or thing being referenced is unknown. It makes the reader work harder to keep track of who or what is being discussed, sometimes requiring them to reread text — or
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Elegant variation distracts the reader, removes clarity, and can introduce inadvertent humour or muddled metaphors. It can confuse readers who are unaware, for example, that the Pope is the Bishop of Rome. It fails to fix the real cause of repetitive prose, which is usually repeated
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Bubbles (born April 30, 1983) is a common chimpanzee once kept as a pet by the American singer Michael Jackson, who bought him from a Texas research facility in the early 1980s. Bubbles frequently traveled with Jackson, whose attachment to him led to media
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Fifteen-year-old Paul McCartney met Lennon that July, and joined as a rhythm guitarist shortly after. In February 1958, McCartney invited his friend George Harrison, also fifteen, to watch the band. Harrison auditioned for Lennon, impressing him with his
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This likely derives from a fear of repeating the word "Batman". But replacing the second mention with words such as "titular", "eponymous" or "title character" only adds redundancy. It goes without saying that the name Batman is in the title
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This isn't the clearest or most efficient way to provide that information. It requires the reader to work out who "the fifteen-year-old" refers to — made more difficult here as the preceding sentence says McCartney is also fifteen.
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Fifteen-year-old Paul McCartney met Lennon that July, and joined as a rhythm guitarist shortly after. In February 1958, McCartney invited his friend George Harrison to watch the band.
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Similarly to "titular" and "eponymous", readers can tell when you're mentioning something you have previously mentioned, and it probably isn't important to point out. For example:
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Who was the auxiliary percussionist? It was Nastanovich himself – a fact mentioned several thousand words earlier in the article, so good luck if you missed that.
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This comes at the cost of obscuring the name of the novel. That's OK if the context suggests the film and novel share the name, as in the example above.
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It's no great riddle, but it obfuscates information to no advantage. It's simpler and clearer to introduce information in a logical, sequential way:
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example: "The territory of the municipality of Grado extends between the mouth of the Isonzo and the Adriatic Sea and the lagoon of the same name."
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is the third studio album by American singer-songwriter Joanna Newsom, released on February 23, 2010 via Drag City as the official follow-up to
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function is to avoid repeating the original term, and so is uncomfortably close to actually writing "I am avoiding repeating the name here".
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Alternatively, including "the" in the link text makes "the novel" unambiguous, especially when combined with the year of publication, per
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This seems to have been absorbed from press releases and video game journalism (reliable sources of bad writing). It's an example of the
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Elegant variation is often used on Knowledge in reference to individuals – for example, writing "the director" instead of "Spielberg".
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It contains the advice or opinions of one or more Knowledge contributors. This page is not an encyclopedia article, nor is it one of
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Why be imprecise? Be clear and direct and write "game", "film", etc instead of "title". Or remove the word entirely where possible:
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This presumably emerges from an attempt to avoid repetition. But the English language already has a solution for repetitive nouns:
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The word "title" is sometimes used as a synonym for media such as movies, magazines, and particularly video games. For example:
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Bubbles (born April 30, 1983) is a common chimpanzee once kept as a pet by the American singer Michael Jackson, who bought
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is a 2015 science fiction film directed by Ridley Scott and starring Matt Damon. Drew Goddard adapted the screenplay from
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Nastanovich also later recalled an awkward incident where it became apparent that Godrich did not know the name of
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The Standing Committee is the highest organ of the Central Commission for Discipline Inspection (CCDI) when the
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The Standing Committee is the highest organ of the Central Commission for Discipline Inspection (CCDI) when the
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talks about how much of the film arose from his feeling that movies are like dreams or drug-induced reveries.
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As with other cases of elegant variation, it's better to just write the word again, or use a pronoun:
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In articles about different works with the same title, it's common to wikilink using something like
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Elegant variation is sometimes used to add information. For example, the following passage from the
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When used with wikilinks, terms such as "eponymous" make the wikilink destination less clear (see
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Where repeating the name feels repetitive, the cause is usually inefficient syntax. For example:
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Readers can see when a word or phrase is in a title or phrase. We don't need to tell them.
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Scorsese, De Palma, and Schrader are all directors – so which director does this refer to?
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It may be clunky, but it beats "of the same name", which tries to mask clunkiness with
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According to Scorsese, it was Brian De Palma who introduced him to Schrader. In
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Sarah and Louise went to a supermarket, where Sarah bought Louise an ice cream.
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Alternatively, we could use two sentences to reduce the sense of repetition.
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It adds no information — if the title is the same, then readers can see that.
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The following example of elegant variation, from the article about the band
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Without "the latter" and "the former", the sentence might feel repetitive:
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article tells us that George Harrison was 15 when he met John Lennon:
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This is an example of how repetition usually emerges from repeated
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Don't overuse synonyms — they distract readers and remove clarity.
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Sarah and Louise went to a supermarket, where the former bought
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This was once the lead sentence of the article about the album
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In most cases, just repeating the name is clean and natural:
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is the attempt to relieve repetition by replacing words with
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This isn't ideal, because it isn't clear where the wikilink
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about elegant variation that mentions this Knowledge essay
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Here's a passage from an old version of the article about
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A word sometimes used to avoid repetition. For example:
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auditioned for Lennon, impressing him with his playing.
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games, films, comics or some combination of all three.
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The solution isn't necessarily obvious. For example:
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It can make it less clear what is being referred to.
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instead, prose becomes clearer and simpler overall.
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At a supermarket, Sarah bought Louise an ice cream.
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essay
Knowledge's policies or guidelines
thoroughly vetted by the community
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WP:ELEVAR
WP:ELVAR
WP:SECONDMENTION
Elegant variation
synonyms
H. W. Fowler
ironic criticism
using plain English
Bubbles
pronouns
Taxi Driver
Pavement
Have One on Me
Beatles
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WP:FORMERLATTER
WP:LATTERFORMER
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WP:ELEVARTITLE
specialized style fallacy
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WP:TITULAR
WP:SELFTITLED
WP:SELF-TITLED
superhero film
Tim Burton

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